Saturday, July 21, 2012

attempt #1

         do
        burn
    her     with
      the   lit
       candle
          or
       smash
     my head
      with the
   candlestick
   that proudly
   embraces it.
   instead,why
   not kill two
    birds with
    one stone

12 comments:

Sahil Chopra said...

@rhea: :) thanks!

Zaneta said...

Ufff!!

Sahil Chopra said...

@RoGue - hmm?

Yogesh said...

and how?

Sahil Chopra said...

@yogesh - and how what exactly? :)

Unknown said...

interesting :) looking fwd to more such stuff :)

Sahil Chopra said...

@niharika - thanks. will keep them coming, hopefully.

Yogesh said...

Hmm.. that was just a random thought that struck me after reading the verse, the thought with which it ends. The answer is not important really :-)

Amiya said...

Remarkable! Interesting idea.

Sahil Chopra said...

@amiya - you've got to check out the works of Robert Lax. you cannot not fall in love with him.

Anonymous said...

the poem makes no sense to a novice poet like myself but the concept is amazing! look forward to reading more attempts.

Sahil Chopra said...

@anonymous: even if the words don't work, the form is called shape poetry - just in case you're be interested. thanks!